Some of the advice that I took from the last elevator pitch is to focus more on the service and what it has to offer. The main thing is I changed my focus in this pitch more on why you need the service and discussed that more than the steps you have to take to use the service. The main thing is getting people to my app and that is the focus because once the app is downloaded on the phone all else will be self-explanatory. Tap&Snack is filling a need that many people do not think about on a day to day basis and that is the amount of time out of their day they use to obtain food and snacks. I think that by the end of the semester my service my pith will be fully developed.
Markemia,
ReplyDeleteI think that your overall pitch was really good! The only thing I would suggest is for these types of assignments, maybe have a friend or roommate record it for you. That is just simply advice for some quality. I think the idea you have is amazing, and I know it would be beneficial to me! I know this assignment was difficult for me as I did not get enough feedback to change anything significant.
here is the link to my blog:
http://poecr.blogspot.com/2016/03/elevator-pitch-no-3.html
Markemia,
ReplyDeleteI really liked your pitch! Standing in front of a camera seems very natural for you. It is definitely not for me! I particularly liked your hand moments and expressions. It definitely kept me interested. Elevator pitch's are supposed to be quick and to the point. I definitely got the point of your service by just watching this one pitch and that's what I was hoping for. I would definitely say that your service is similar to Jimmy Johns, but for snacks! Would you hire people to deliver these snacks on bike or car? Bikes definitely work well for Jimmy Johns so that's definitely something I would look into. I know when I get hungry while study and order Jimmy Johns I get really excited when it comes so fast! Great post over all!
Here is my post: http://shainaent3003.blogspot.com/2016/03/elevator-pitch-no-3.html
Hi Markemia,
ReplyDeleteReally neat pitch idea you have going on here! It is something unique and desirable, especially for college kids who just want a quick snack. You had a very good presence in your video, and spoke clearly. Some of the video quality could be improved, but I understand there is only so much we can do on a laptop or camera phone. I am glad you took into consideration some of the previous comments you received and I hope this assignment has taught you a lot! Thanks for sharing and check out my post at: http://karinatamayo.blogspot.com/2016/03/elevator-pitch-no3.html